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Rain Dog


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Posted Wed Mar 18th, 2009 6:37pm Post subject: "When I am old..." poem
I'm currently taking a course on creative writing and PamJH encouraged me to post some of my writings here. I'll probably post more later when I have written more and edited and re-edited the texts I've already done, but here's one of my first contributions to the course. We had to write a poem beginning with the words "When I am old.." and this is what I came up with..



When I am old

When I am old I want to be young at heart
like that old song goes
I want my life to get more exciting every day
and I want to have the curiosity of a child

When I am old and decades have passed
I hope I will not feel guilt or regret
I shall not complain about the things I cannot change
instead of being grumpy, I want to be content

And when I get really old and realise my time is up
I am going to remember that having lived at all
I was one of the lucky ones






Any comments will be much appreciated!
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PamJH


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Posted Wed Mar 18th, 2009 6:45pm Post subject: "When I am old..." poem
Now this is lovely. I can tell you worked hard to get the words to flow together from one line to the other. And you used enjambments (learned that from our Mr. Fry)! I especially like the third stanza - it contains good advice for all of us.

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Rain Dog


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Posted Wed Mar 18th, 2009 7:26pm Post subject: "When I am old..." poem
Thank you very much. I have been reading The Ode Less Travelled recently, it has been very helpful even though we haven't written any poems in a particular metre or anything. It's a treasure for anyone interested in poetry and I've had fun doing the exercises from the book.
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